英译 朱庆余《近试上张水部》

沅湘

英译  《近试上张水部》
作者：朱庆余
翻译：沅湘

洞房昨夜停红烛，
待晓堂前拜舅姑。
妆罢低声问夫婿，
画眉深浅入时无。

To Minister Zhang of Aquatic Engineering as the Test Is Around the Corner
Authored by Zhu Qingyu (of Tang Dynasty)
Translated by Yuanxiang

In the wedding  bower I kept candles burning last night
For the morn audience by my parents-in-law
And after make-up lowering my voice asked my husband:
In brow-tinting deep or shallow have I done the fashion right?

龙血树

古诗英译相当艰难，佩服！

沅湘

龙血树 发表于 2017-9-17 20:24
古诗英译相当艰难，佩服！

谢谢阅读和评论。我这是练习。

山菊

应该请@海外逸士 来看~~~他翻译过很多

海外逸士

山菊大姐有召，只能應卯。譯文基本可以，細節處尚可商榷。

In the wedding bower I kept candles burning last night，既然是通宵，要用overnight.
At dawn I go to the hall to greet my parents-in-law.
After make-up, I ask my husband in low voice:
In eyebrow-tinting, dark or faint, have I done the fashion right?